How to describe: Writing clear places and characters

How to describe places and characters

Learning how to describe places and people lucidly is a vital skill for all fiction authors. Effective descriptive words show mood and character in addition to appearance. The best descriptions draw us in and keep us rapt with attention, placing us in a scene. Here are 5 tips for writing memorable places and characters:

1. Use great (not merely ‘nice’) adjectives

The word ‘nice’ itself is a good example of a nice adjective. It’s nondescript, the opposite of descriptive. If a friend went on vacation and described the Colosseum as ‘nice’, you wouldn’t be any wiser as to how it felt to stand in an ancient, enormous arena. Similarly, if someone described their new friend to you as ‘nice’, you wouldn’t know much about their personality or appearance.

Great adjectives do extra work. If the traveler said ‘you’ve got to see it, it was awe-inspiring, really towering’, you’d have a sense of both the feeling the Colosseum evoked and a sense of its scale.

When you’re describing a place or a person, think about the specificity of the describing words you choose. You could say, ‘The man was short’ yet readers might ask themselves ‘how short?’ If you said ‘the man was minute’, this suggests not only that the character is especially small in size but also registers a sense of surprise or shock (given the strength of the descriptive word).

One way to get the most out of adjectives is to look up their etymologies. The origins of words often explain additional connotations that we’re maybe dimly aware of but don’t think about. For example, ‘short’ (from Old English via Old High German) means ‘to cut’, with the notion of something cut off. ‘Minute’ (from Latin minutus) means ‘chopped small’. Already a much more visceral image – one of little pieces – underlies this more expressive describing word.

2. Use describing words that show more than appearance

How to describe - character and appearanceAspiring authors, when introducing characters, often describe people by their eye colour alone. This is ineffective as description for two reasons: Eye colour doesn’t give us any information about a character’s personality (although red eyes may suggest a character has been crying and red irises are a clichéd sign of supernatural malevolence).

The second reason why eye colour by itself isn’t effective is that this aspect of physical appearance lacks substantial variety (unless you examine eyes from inches away).

Whether you’re describing a ramshackle old building or a vivacious, sprightly character, use descriptive language that conveys nature or character along with appearance. Here, for example, Donna Tartt describes the Greek lecturer Julian at Hampden College in The Secret History:

‘His eyes were kind, frank, more gray than blue.’

Although Tartt includes colour, the emphasis is on what Julian’s eyes say about his personality, not only his appearance.

Similarly, Tartt conveys plenty of character in writing about place. Here’s her description of an opulent, sprawling country home:

Walking into the library, I took in my breath sharply and stopped: glass-fronted bookcases and Gothic panels, stretching fifteen feet to a frescoed and plaster-medallioned ceiling. In the back of the room was a marble fireplace, big as a sepulchre, and a globed gasolier – dripping with prisms and strings of crystal beading – sparkled in the dim.(p. 89)

Tartt’s description conveys the character of the house acutely, contrasting the dim of its vastness and uninhabited mood with its splendour (light fittings ‘dripping with prisms’).

3. Practice how to filter place and character description through a character’s viewpoint

One of the important functions of description in narration is that it gives us information about the viewpoint character doing the describing. A fearful character entering a crowded house party might describe the noise and action in terms that suggest being overwhelmed. An extrovert, on the other hand, might describe exactly the same scene as exciting and energy-giving.

These differences become important in multi-perspective novels where there are multiple characters’ viewpoints. Showing the same scene from different character’s viewpoints would mean making different descriptive choices.

As an exercise write a 500-word scene, for example a student protest on a campus. Describe the scene from the viewpoint of one of the active protesters, then describe the same scene from the viewpoint of a jaded academic watching from the sidelines who is skeptical. Think about how each might describe their surrounds and bystanders or participants.

Filtering description via characters’ viewpoints gives you a way to sketch in and develop characters’ personalities and outlooks without explicitly telling the reader what a character thinks or feels. Subtly showing characters’ inner worlds through their description of the world around them deepens how real characters appear.

4. Build descriptions over the course of your story

how to describe characters using settingTo give your writing descriptive power, build on your descriptions. If a house looks abandoned and neglected from the outside, describe further signs of this abandonment on the interior.

Similarly, if you describe a striking detail about a character at first introduction, bring the detail back when relevant. In The Secret History, Tartt first describes the overbearing character Bunny thus:

‘He wore the same jacket every day, a shapeless brown tweed that was frayed at the elbows and short in the sleeves, and his sandy hair was parted on the left, so a long forelock fell over one bespectacled eye. Bunny Corcoran was his name, Bunny being somehow short for Edmund. His voice was loud and honking, and carried in the dining halls.’ (p. 18)

The details about Bunny’s clothes are an early clue to Bunny’s character, as it later emerges that although he claims his family is wealthy he perpetually borrows money from his friends. The loudness of his voice suggests an unconscious character. Tartt builds on this detail later when she describes Bunny’s friend Henry trying to avoid him:

The next morning, around ten, I was ironing a shirt in the kitchen when there was another knock at the door. I went into the hall and found Henry standing there.
‘Does that sound like Bunny to you?’ he said quietly.
‘No,’ I said. This knock was fairly light; Bunny always beat at the door as if to bash it in. (p. 155)

Like his ‘honking’ voice, Bunny’s way of announcing his arrival is described as brash and invasive. Through building character description over time, Tartt shows in Bunny a character who is invasive and unreflective. This descriptive building deepens our awareness of the character. The reader can almost predict how Bunny will behave in a given situation.

5. Build a rich vocabulary of words to describe people and places

Actively expand the set of descriptive words and synonyms you have in your toolkit.

For example, characters can be divided into four simplified types. Sanguine (cheerful), melancholic (sad), phlegmatic (easygoing) and choleric (quick-tempered).  Here are adjectives to describe each type, with the origin in brackets:

Sanguine character type:

Joyful (from Latin gaudere, ‘to rejoice’).
Vivacious (from Latin vivax, ‘lively, vigorous’).
Excitable (from Latin excitare, ‘stir up, arouse, awaken, incite’).

Melancholic character type:

Glum (from Middle English gloumen, ‘become dark’).
Despondent (from Latin despondere, ‘to give up, lose, lose heart, resign, to promise in marriage’).
Sorrowful (from Old English sorgful, ‘sad, anxious, careful, distressing, doleful’).

Phlegmatic character type:

Even (from Old English efen, ‘level, equal, like, calm, harmonious’).
Stable (from Old French estable, ‘constant, steadfast, unchanging’).
Placid (from Latin placidus, ‘pleasing, peaceful, gentle, quiet, calm’).

Choleric character type:

Reactive (from Late Latin, re- ‘back’ + agere, ‘to do, perform’).
Vociferous (from Latin vociferari, ‘to shout, yell, cry out’).
Fiery (from Middle English fier, ‘fire’).

This list shows how each adjective trails a list of subtle associations behind it. If you describe a ‘glum’ character, for example, you could pair this with describing words that intensify the root image, ‘to darken’:

In the darkening evening he slouched towards the town centre, glum, hands thrust in pockets. A passing suit gingerly crossed to the other side of the street at his approach (as though fearful of some encroaching chasm).

As an exercise, take all the adjectives in a paragraph of your writing and find their origins in a dictionary. Are there synonyms that are stronger or have more effective connotations or associations?

Learn how to describe characters and places more acutely with the help of Now Novel’s tools and guides, and get feedback on your descriptive writing from the Now Novel community.

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  • Savannah Gilbo

    Great article! I particularly liked point #5 and your examples were very helpful!

  • S.L Morris

    I love this. Thank you so much.

  • 🍂🎃Sarah🎃🍂

    My advice is, don’t over do the fancy big words. People don’t want to read a book where they have to refer to a dictionary every time.

  • Shay Lynn

    Great examples! This really made me think about how I can improve my descriptions.

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